Eliot's innovative poems are set in a bleak, fractured landscape, devoid of hope | Studied Poetry
H1 Sample Answer

Question

As this question is worth 50 marks, spend no more than 50 minutes total on it in your final exam (2 minutes planning, 45 minutes writing and 3 minutes reviewing once completed). Make sure to read the question two or three times to thoroughly understand what it is asking.
In your answer, identify instances in Eliot’s poetry where there is a strong sense of a bleak, fractured world (this might mean either externally or internally and can extend to questions of identity and faith). In allowing for this broad interpretation of the question, you will give yourself scope to analyse many of your studied poems. As this question also requires you to discuss some of Eliot’s innovative approaches to his subject matter, language, style and poetic techniques should all be addressed.
You must demonstrate your knowledge of a wide array of poems and it is advisable to analyse 4-6 poems in your response. Your use of effective quotations from a variety of poems will be rewarded and the use of lively, sophisticated language is expected. Finally, once you have completed the whole paper, check your answer again as you are more likely to spot mistakes after taking a short break from it.

The essay will be marked as follows:
Purpose: focus/relevance of response/evidence of critical literacy/originality, etc.
Coherence: sustained focus/appropriate management and sequencing of ideas/coherence/cross reference/effective use of accurate quotation and reference, etc.
Language: managed and controlled to achieve clear communication throughout/fluency/quality of expression, etc.
Mechanics: accuracy of mechanics.
The poetry of T.S. Eliot can be challenging and confronting. There is an overwhelming sense of hopelessness and apathy toward a modern world that has lost all integrity and substance. In many of Eliot’s poems, the landscape is used to convey this sense of fragmentation and bleakness. This can be seen in poems such as "Journey of the Magi", "Usk", "Preludes", "Aunt Helen" and "Rannoch". Though the poems vary in location, they are primarily concerned with Eliot’s frustration and lament for a world that is arduous and devoid of hope. Reading Eliot’s poems was a challenging experience as his innovative style demanded deep contemplation from the reader but with patience, they prove to be moving and rewarding.

The question is directly engaged with here and the keywords from the question are re-stated. The focus is on a hopeless world and there is an acknowledgement of Eliot’s style. The examiner will expect both of these ideas to be analysed in each of the poems in the body of the essay.
The landscape and its potential for hardship features in the poem "Journey of the Magi". In this poem, Eliot expresses self-doubt and questions the purpose of religious conversion or the "new dispensation". The poet expertly captures the voice of one of the magi, who reflects "A cold coming we had of it...A hard time we had of it". The journey itself acts as a metaphor to reflect Eliot’s own spiritual journey to Anglicanism and the self-doubt that accompanies such a radical conversion. Though Eliot uses the magi to explore his spiritual journey and search for meaning, the reader will find that elements of doubt and disillusion persist. The bleak and treacherous journey acts as a backdrop to convey this self-doubt in an effective way.
The biblical imagery of Christ the Conqueror, appearing as "an old white horse gallop[ing] away" and "three trees on a low sky" suggests an anxiety over this new destination to which the magi have arrived. Eliot’s own insecurities about his spiritual conversion can be seen here and he wonders, "were we led all that way for Birth or Death?". The rhetorical question solidifies the apprehension felt by the poet as he departs from an old belief system. "Journey of the Magi" is a wonderfully complex tale that innovatively uses a biblical setting and characterisation to explore Eliot’s deepest concerns and anxieties regarding faith and the purpose of his life.

Both stylistic features and the theme of the poem are explored here. The student focuses on doubt and an absence of hope, demonstrating how the landscape in the poem reflects these themes.
In Eliot’s poem, "Usk", the landscape is presented in a mythical yet fragmented way to convey Eliot’s concerns with faith and mysticism. The poem, though concise, is one of his most complex and thought-provoking works. Though the landscape is rich in imagery, with the alliterative "white hart behind the white well", Eliot uses the richness of "Usk" to underscore a disconnection between modern society and true faith. The poem invites the reader to consider their own faith and to "glance aside"; to abstain from false belief systems. There is a sense of exasperation in the tone of the poem and this is solidified with the lyrical instruction to "gently dip, but not too deep". Thus, as one delves further into the meaning of the poem, the landscape can be interpreted as a distraction from true faith and Eliot works hard to convince his reader to look beyond such distractions.
Eliot utilises internal rhyme to direct his reader to a place of renewed faith. He writes "Seek only there/Where the grey light meets the green air". The assonance present in the line adds to the lyrical rhythm of these closing lines and there is a new sense of ease and comfort that was absent in the opening of the poem. The once fragmented landscape is rejuvenated and Eliot’s earlier lack of hope is lifted. Rich symbolism in the "hermit’s chapel, the pilgrim’s prayer" underscores this renewed faith. Thus, in "Usk", Eliot demonstrates how a fractured and disjointed landscape can experience a rebirth and a resurrection of sorts. Though many of his poems remain devoid of hope, this poem's affirmation is comforting.

This is a good example of how a student can interpret a challenging Leaving Certificate question in a flexible way. The poem "Usk" is positive and hopeful and so the student uses it as an example of a poem that is not entirely 'devoid of hope'. Thus, they use a poem they know well and adapt it to fit the set question and engage in an analytical discussion.
The bleak, desolate landscape of the urban environment is presented in "Preludes". In this poem, the monotony of modern life, where individuals are disconnected from one another and their surroundings, is examined. Eliot portrays a grimy, desolate cityscape filled with "burnt-out ends of smoky days", emphasising decay and stagnation. Sibilance is utilised in section one of the poem as the "smell of steaks in passageways" is evoked to convey the urban setting. Synecdoche sees the urban setting made up of a collection of "muddy feet" and "hands that are raising dingy shades", thereby reinforcing the sense of disconnection that pervades the poem. Eliot’s attention to detail in each vignette highlights humanity’s alienation from authentic experience and there is a clear sense of fracture and desolation present.
The poem shifts between descriptions of the city and glimpses into individual experiences, with Eliot trying to make sense of man’s purpose and existence. The repetition of "and" in part three of the poem suggests frustration as the speaker observes "And when all the world came back/And the light crept up...And you heard the sparrows...". This repetition underscores the banality of the passing of time and the lack of any significant or worthwhile experience occurring. Eliot’s recurring references to morning and evening imply an unending cycle of futility as the clock moves from "four and five and six o’clock". The poem showcases a faceless, hostile society in a stark and bleak setting, suggesting a world that is without hope or aspiration.

The student engages with the keywords of the set question, ensuring that their discussion of each poem demonstrates a sense of hopelessness and a bleak landscape.
Eliot turns his attention from the outside world to the domestic sphere in his poem, "Aunt Helen". In this poem, Eliot uses the internal confines of a house "near a fashionable square" to expose the disregard and disconnection present in modern society. The tone and register adopted by the poet reflect the sense of emotional distance between the speaker and his aunt whom he called "Mrs Helen Slingsby", explaining that she had "servants to the number of four". The rigidity in the language mirrors a society that is repressed and disconnected. In this way, Eliot uses an innovative approach to critique modernity.
The poet introduces two more memorable characters into the poem, "the footman...holding the second housemaid on his knees -", exposing the disregard that Aunt Helen’s servants had for her. The use of humour in the latter half of the poem and the enjambment employed as the lines run on reflect an unrestricted energy that has been released with the Aunt’s passing. This shift in tone and rhythm underscores Eliot’s overarching message: that one’s life and impact are very quickly forgotten, thus reinforcing the futility of life. The domestic environment is bleak and irreverent, acting as a microcosm of wider society. "Aunt Helen" allows Eliot to carefully examine the fragmentation that pervades the modern world and his sense of despondency is clear.
A bleak and fractured landscape is nowhere more evident than in Eliot’s poem, "Rannoch, by Glencoe". Here, Eliot presents the reader with a bleak and desolate scene where "the crow starves...[and] the patient stag breeds for the rifle". The brutal imagery and sibilance emphasise a landscape that retains a violent historical past. Eliot notes that "substance crumbles...moon cold or moon hot" and in this way, hopelessness and disconnection are conveyed. The fractured language, whereby independent and seemingly disconnected images are presented to the reader, further cements an overarching sense of desolation and despair.
Though the poem explores a violent historical past, Eliot cleverly utilises lethargic and stagnant imagery of a road that "winds in listlessness" and swords described as "languor of broken steel". The landscape holds "memory...beyond the bone" and the bleak and inhospitable Rannoch acts as an extended metaphor for Eliot’s overall sense of hopelessness and internal dislocation. The closing lines, full of consonance, mimic the harsh landscape as "pride snapped" and there is no "concurrence of bone". Eliot adeptly employs these harsh sounds to convey a lack of hope or resolution. In "Rannoch", the bleak and fractured landscape works to convey a sense of hopelessness and despair. Historical violence cannot be erased and it pervades our modern existence.

The student makes a concerted effort to analyse the poetic techniques employed by Eliot, thereby engaging with the 'innovative' aspect of the question. The focus of the discussion is on the landscape and themes of despair. Therefore, all aspects of the question are thoroughly engaged with.
In conclusion, Eliot conveys his antipathy and frustration with the modern world through his exploration of the landscape. This is most clearly seen in poems such as "Journey of the Magi", "Usk", "Preludes", "Aunt Helen" and "Rannoch". Though the poems vary in location, they are primarily concerned with Eliot’s frustration with a world that lacks hope or integrity. Eliot’s innovative and experimental style challenged me to consider each poem deeply and his sense of hopelessness became clear with each reading. I found Eliot’s themes of despair and fragmentation provocative and intriguing.

The most common mistakes made by students for this question which significantly reduces their overall grade are:
- lack of engagement with the set task;
- the inability to sustain the response over the entire answer;
- being unable to manage and control language to achieve clear communication;
- spelling and grammatical errors.

This is an excellent answer in which the student has fully answered the question. They provided a high-quality discussion and thorough development of five of Eliot's poems which is clear, concise and the correct length to gain full marks in the final exam.
This response engages with the question directly by identifying a selection of Eliot’s poems that explore a bleak and fractured landscape. The student provides a convincing argument to highlight how these landscapes convey a sense of hopelessness and they ensure that the discussion centres on Eliot’s innovative style to get his message across. Finally, their writing is fluid and the expression is sophisticated. There are ample quotations utilised for each poem, demonstrating that the student has an excellent knowledge of Eliot’s poems.
Purpose = 15/15 marks
Coherence = 15/15 marks
Language = 15/15 marks
Mechanics = 5/5 marks
Overall grade = 50/50 marks = 100% = H1

Sue teaches English and history at Pobalscoil Inbhear Scéine in Kenmare, Co. Kerry. She has over twenty years of experience and is also an examiner. Sue obtained her BA/B.Ed at the University of New South Wales, Australia, in 2001. She has lived in Ireland since 2003 and writes short stories and auto-fiction in her spare time. She is currently undertaking a Postgraduate Diploma in School Leadership with the University of Limerick.